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[Tom Henrik]

I really like this track, although I think Dvoe goes a bit over the top at the end there. But what else can be expected from someone who is truly gifted guitar-wise?

[DeathDude]

It's his signature style you can make out in parts of the song , this one was good different style than his usual but still wicked nevertheless. truly is excellent all around.

[Flop]

I think it's pretty good. I'm looking forward to hearing more.

[Doubler]

It's very good

@Tai:  

@Dvoe:

[Juni Ori]

Hmm... something odd in rhytm in couple of times, but otherwise quite good. I'd say this got lots of potential. Now try to get basist and drummer, they would make wonders!

[A. J. Raffles]

Juni Ori, on Nov 28 2005, 12:39 PM, said:

Hmm... something odd in rhytm in couple of times, but otherwise quite good. I'd say this got lots of potential. Now try to get basist and drummer, they would make wonders!

Well, Daka could probably take care of the drumming [subtle hint]if only he could be induced to read this thread instead of checking his own threads twelve times a day.[/subtle hint].

[DeathDude]

Juni Ori Posted on Nov 28 2005, on 05:39 AM, said:

Hmm... something odd in rhytm in couple of times, but otherwise quite good. I'd say this got lots of potential. Now try to get basist and drummer, they would make wonders!

Heh that's exactly what our band needs a drummer or at least someone who can do some good percussion, and I'm sure we could always use Tai as a guest vocalist hehe.

[DakaSha]

ok i listened to it and ill try to work something out. ive never tried to combine beatbox with vocals and a guitar riff but hey... its a fun challenge

did you have anything specific in mind?


edit:
i cant promise a THING though.... it might just not work out... if it dont work ill just have to give up and let you know  

beatbox IS a little more hip-hop related

[Kon-Tiki]

Great! Can't wait to hear the result

[Dvoe]

Wow, just listened to the vocal/guitar final mix for the first time. Turned out quite well I must say, but the song could use some editing in a few places. I'll try to trim and tweak the track a bit here and there.

Looking forward to hearing your work Daka and I look forward to your next "guitar mockup" Tai. Good day

[taikara]

hehe... thanks everyone

I think I would tweak and rearrange a few things myself, but I'm so damn happy to have actual real backup for one of my songs, that I probably haven't been as picky as I normally might be

But here goes: I think the guitar is stretched out a bit too long after the verses, and chorus, it makes it go out of the time I intended, and a bit too short after the vocal bridge, because I don't have time to get from the word "completely" to the chorus again.

And I think maybe that awesome guitar bridge would be better placed before or after the vocal bridge, so the song would end on the last "simplicity" series, and would break up the repetitious feel that the song has right now.

But the more I listen to it, the more awesome I feel that guitar bridge is.

And of course, the vocals could use a retake in some places, I baubled the bridge a bit, and the volume is sort of out of whack. Also, I would probably add some vocal layovers, and maybe some echo in key places to give more depth.

The "classical" intro and outro is a bit weird, but it definitely grows on you the more you listen to it.

@ Daka: Hey, I think it'll fit right in, considering how completely eclectic it already is pairing a ... whatever you call my style vocalist with a heavy metal guitarist. Bring on the hip-hop beats, fo shizzle mah nizzle

[DeathDude]

Nice critique Taikara, turned out good the way you analyzed the different parts of the song, your thoughts on them and how you would change it to make improvements, nicely written. Personally I thought the vocal parts turned out great   yet it would be cool to add layovers and some echos to really add to the song. I gotta try that one day with some of my tracks.

[Qbix]

Neat. Very neat.

In the begining of the track your voice sounded a bit hollow. (like you were singing in large empty room), but when the guiters backed you up it sounded quite great. Your voice is quite suitable for metal actually. But I must admit that I have a hard time imagining how it will sound with a different support "band".

It must have been quite an excersise making up a guitertrack which sounds quite natural to the song.


Keep it up!

[DeathDude]

I agree, Tai's got a good clean style of vocals, they could fit into metal nicely least in the prog genre of metal which isn't always the easiest genre to sing in and sound good but Tai pulls it off . I myself sing in that genre (still working on my power vocal sound though ) but she's got her style down nicely, and really with the presence of the guitar her voice still sticks out and draws attention which I think is very impressive.

[DakaSha]

im sorry to say i dont have that much time to really sit down and work on a "beat"... ill do it but it might take awihle... there is no way im going to rush it. itll just end up terrible

another thing... i still only own that crap mic...