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[A. J. Raffles]

While we're at it...

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Emily Enough: Imprisoned is one of the newsest AGS games to date...

I quite like the word "newsest", though.

[Kon-Tiki]

Oops. Shows what happens when I don't fully proof-read a review for a change. Ok, am going to fix these.

Edit: Fixed those, and a few others (mainly sentences starting with but), but didn't add that extra s. "The graphics come" is correct.

Edited by Kon-Tiki, 02 November 2005 - 10:29 PM.

[Juni Ori]

Little Fighter 2:

"This isn't nescesarily a bad thing though, as Street Fighter 2 proves."

[Doubler]

A tiny thing, but as we strive for perfection:

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Torus Trooper isa fine example of "twitch" gaming

[BeefontheBone]

D'oh! Missed those italics too. *fixed*

[Moogle]

I like typos.....

[Sean]

It is nice that the auther has made 2 different versions, so that everyone can enjoy this game.

Should that not be author ?

Nice review Frodo

[DeathDude]

Fixed.

[Frodo]

Sean, on Dec 7 2005, 05:30 PM, said:

It is nice that the auther has made 2 different versions, so that everyone can enjoy this game.

Should that not be author ?

Nice review Frodo

Oops.  Well spotted Sean.  
Glad you like the review.    

Thanks for fixing it DeathDude  

[Romano]

In Nomltest FS:

Summery
Very fun, original (I think), addictive, sleek, nice looking freeware game that is only a 317kb download.

I think it should be Summary  


Btw. nice review DakaSha  

[A. J. Raffles]

Erm, maybe he meant it reminded him of a summery breeze... OK, maybe not.

[DeathDude]

Fixed

[Fruit Pie Jones]

With the Abandonia Grammar Squad inactive until Raffles resurfaces, I've got to get my nitpicking fix elsewhere, so...

All of the following are from the Frederik Pohl's Gateway review:

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In the year 2077 hummankind discovers a stash

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which basically makes it ddifferent from most other text adventures in two ways

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Wether you want to type or click your way through the game is up to you

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but the graphics really nothing more than images of the location you're currantly at

Also in that last one, something ("are," perhaps) seems to be missing after the word "graphics."

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while the optimists will say that the they're actually quite impressive

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sound tracks that make you want to reach volume knob

I'm thinking there should be a "for the" in there somewhere.

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one thing that makes it stand out as classic among adventure games; it's puzzles.

No apostrophe is necessary in the possessive "its."  Also, that semicolon should be a full-on colon.

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You have to pay close attention, though, you never know what bit of information could prove usefull later on.

Also, I think there should be a "since" or an "as" or even a "because" before "you never know."

[DeathDude]

Fixed (Well most still working)

Edit: Done, think I got em all.

Edited by DeathDude, 20 December 2005 - 10:24 PM.

[A. J. Raffles]

Fruit Pie Jones, on Dec 20 2005, 10:02 PM, said:

With the Abandonia Grammar Squad inactive until Raffles resurfaces, I've got to get my nitpicking fix elsewhere, so...

I'm awfully sorry, FPJ, but to tell you the truth, I wasn't planning to resurface on AB, actually. Being active on both forums just eats up too much of my time, and for personal reasons I decided for AR. I feel terrible for letting down the grammar squad, but it's quite impossible for me to stay - sorry.

About the review: well, it's still got far less mistakes than the NetHack review on AB.